Mr.Mou @ ShiShi AP Center

TPO61 task1 revision


Imagine that you must decide between two homes to live in. One place is very large and is brand new; but it is very far from your place of work or university. The second place is very small and is very old, but you would be able to get to work or university in less than five minutes. Which place would you prefer to live in? Explain why.


Task 1 答题结构

  1. opinion
  2. reason 1
  3. development
  4. development
  5. reason 2
  6. development
  7. development
  8. conclusion (if there’s time)


Student’s name Original Text Revised Text
Seanna Maybe I would choose to live with my friends, because this way I wouldn’t feel very lonely. And if we were renting a house, I would save more money and could do other things. And life alone would make me feel scared. But if we lived with friends, we could play games together and watch movies together and be happy together. Then you will get more and more happy. “I might choose to live with my friends because that way, I wouldn’t feel very lonely. If we were renting a house together, I could save more money and have the opportunity to do other things. Living alone would make me feel scared, but if we lived with friends, we could play games and watch movies together, which would make us happy. Being with friends would bring more happiness into our lives.”
Flora   I’m sorry, but the student did not provide a spoken response.
George I will choose the second choice, although the place is very small and is very old. But I have two reasons for this. The first is because I’m a boy, I’m not very care about the environment that I live. I just can sleep in it, it’s okay. And the second reason is I think the time is very important. And this place I can get to university in less than five minutes. It’s very good. “I would choose the second option, even though the place is small and old. I have two reasons for this. Firstly, as a guy, I don’t really care much about the living environment. As long as I can sleep in it, it’s fine. Secondly, I believe time is crucial. Being able to reach the university in less than five minutes is highly beneficial.”
Fielder For me, I choose the place which is not in Bryant. I think maybe, the first reason is, maybe the place is far from the university, but on the way to the university and the place to work, you may have seen some very interesting things and you have never seen. It can wild your sight. The second reason is, if you choose the place which is very small and old, it’s not good for your living life. You may have bad living habits. You may be upset and the time when you work will not “For me, I would choose the place that is not in Bryant. There are a couple of reasons for this. Firstly, even though the place is far from the university and work, you might come across some interesting things on your way there that you have never seen before. It can be a refreshing change for your eyes. Secondly, if you opt for the small and old place, it may not be conducive to a good living experience. You might develop bad living habits and feel unhappy, which can affect your work-life balance.”
Martin First of all, I like living alone, so I will choose a second house. In this way, I will have a sense of privacy. I live by myself, and I will be freer than the first one, and I don’t have to coordinate with others. I can do what I want without being conflicted. And your roommate may not be so friendly. You may have some conflict with others over the house. So I will choose the second one. “First of all, I prefer to live alone, so I would choose the second house. This way, I would have a greater sense of privacy. Living by myself would allow me more freedom compared to the first option, as I wouldn’t have to coordinate with others. I would be able to do what I want without any conflicts. Additionally, living with a roommate might not always be pleasant, as there could be potential conflicts or disagreements regarding the house. Therefore, I would definitely choose the second place.”
Richard I would choose the home that spend less than five minutes to get to work or university because spending less time to get to work or university can bring me more sleep time and more time to rest. That’s a better way to study or work. So I choose the second one although it’s small and very old. “I would choose the home that takes less than five minutes to get to work or university because spending less time commuting would allow me to have more sleep and rest. It would be a better environment for studying or working. So, even though it’s small and very old, I would choose the second option.”
Kevin I think I will choose all the small places. First, I think it is near the place of work or university. So you can use this time to go to work and university. And you can use this time to study or work. And the second thing is, it’s old, but it doesn’t matter. Because you can put some beautiful furniture in this house, and it will look better. It won’t influence you. “I would prefer the smaller place for a few reasons. Firstly, its proximity to my workplace or university would save me a lot of time. I could utilize this extra time for studying or working. Secondly, although the house may be old, it doesn’t bother me much. I can easily enhance its appearance by adding some beautiful furniture. Ultimately, it wouldn’t have any significant impact on my daily life.”
Wendy I choose very large and it’s brand new house. Although it’s far, but you can be very happy. And comfortable environment can get people enough relax. The instance of living in a big house is because it’s good for our body. If you live in a small and weight environment, your knee and your back will unhealthy. I would choose the very large and brand new house, even though it is far from my workplace or university. I believe that living in a spacious and modern environment can bring a lot of happiness and comfort. Additionally, a big house is beneficial for our physical well-being. If you live in a small and cramped space, it can negatively affect your knees and back, leading to potential health issues. So, for these reasons, I would prefer the larger and newer house despite the distance.
Wesley I think I will choose the second place, that’s very small and very old place and because I think it is very important for the job and I want to get to the job set to less than five minutes because it is important to the job and I think the job and work comes first. It is not easy for us to find a good job this time and it is more difficult to keep the job for a long time so I think I will choose the second job and it is also I don’t need the good environment. “I think I will choose the second place, the small and old one, because it is very important for my job. Being able to get to work in less than five minutes is crucial for me because I prioritize my job and work. In today’s time, finding a good job is not easy, and it is even more difficult to maintain it for a long time. Therefore, I believe choosing the second place would be the best decision. Additionally, I don’t necessarily need a luxurious environment; what matters most to me is the convenience of reaching my workplace.”
Sword I would prefer to choose a small apartment for two reasons. Firstly, the small house is very close to the school, so I can work very conveniently and commute very fast. Secondly, if I live alone and I can do things alone, I can fulfill my own wishes and I can get satisfaction from life. That’s because the very small place can only allow for me to live in. And I don’t want to live in a large place, especially for which I need to share with others. I would prefer to choose a small apartment for two reasons. Firstly, the small house is very close to the school, so I can work conveniently and have a fast commute. Secondly, living alone allows me to fulfill my own wishes and find satisfaction in life. A very small place is perfect for just me, and I don’t want to live in a large place, especially if I have to share it with others.
Cicily I prefer to choose the very large and bad news, because when I stay there, I always have freedom. When I stay at a small and very old place, I feel uncomfortable so that I have bad results for studying. If I stay in a very large and bad news, I can put everything I want, such as books and some objects there, so that I have a good environment for studying. “I would prefer to choose the very large and brand new place because it offers me a sense of freedom. When I stay in a small and very old place, I feel uncomfortable, which negatively affects my studying. However, if I stay in a very large and brand new place, I can have everything I need, such as books and other objects, creating a conducive environment for studying.”
Lynne I chose the second place because I think in the second place I can have more time to sleep in the morning. And I think if I have enough money I can buy a new desk or toys in the home. So I think the second place is a very good choice for me. And the bigger home maybe don’t very good for me. “I chose the second place because I believe it would allow me to have more time to sleep in the morning. Additionally, if I have enough money, I can buy new furniture or toys for the home. Therefore, I believe the second place would be a suitable choice for me. On the other hand, the larger home may not be as beneficial for me.”
Tina The second place, because I think the first place is because it is so far from my home. I will spend a lot of time to go to school. And the room is so big and grand. It’s easy and I feel lonely and anxious. But the second place is so close to my home. So I can get up a little late. And although it’s small, but I think it’s actually the second one. “I would prefer the second place because the first place is too far from my home. It would take a lot of time for me to commute to school or work. Additionally, the large and grand room might feel empty and make me feel lonely and anxious. On the other hand, the second place is very close to my home, allowing me to sleep in a little later. Even though it is small, I believe it is the better option for me.”
Victoria Maybe I want to choose a very large brand because I think most of people think it’s very far from your place of work or university, it’s not very useful, but I think if you have a very large place, it can make me feel so happy and I can have enough time by myself to do some interesting things and maybe owning one table, it’s very good for me. “I would prefer to choose a very large brand new home because even though it may be far from my place of work or university, it would bring me a lot of happiness. Having a spacious place would give me the opportunity to engage in interesting activities and have some quality time for myself. Additionally, having enough space for a table would be very beneficial for me.”
Evelyn I will choose the large place. First, I think the environment can influence your mental idea. For example, if you live in a big and cleaner environment, maybe you will study more hard. Second, although it is far from your university, but you can exercise through the way. Third, the place is very large, so you can have more space to put your own things in the room. It’s very convenient. “I would choose the larger place. Firstly, I believe that the environment can greatly impact one’s mindset. Living in a spacious and clean environment might motivate me to study harder. Secondly, even though it is far from my university, I could use the commute as an opportunity to exercise. Lastly, having a large place would provide me with more space to store my belongings, which would be very convenient.”
Vicky In my opinion, I would choose the first place is very large and is brand new, but it’s very far from my place because life is ourselves. I wanted to in a comfortable environment and the far is not a problem. I can wake up earlier to go to the university or to go to work. “In my opinion, I would choose the first place because it is very large and brand new, even though it is far from my place of work or university. I believe that life is what we make of it, and I value living in a comfortable environment. The distance is not a problem for me as I can wake up earlier to commute to the university or work.”
August to live in the second place, there are two reasons to support my opinion. The first reason is that although this place is very small and is very old, the environment is not very good as the first one, but you can get more time to prepare in the morning so that you can get up later and you can be not so stressful. The second reason is that there are many situations that you have to face off, so living in a bad environment is not something that bad. So that’s the reason that I prefer to live in the second place. I would prefer to live in the second place for two reasons. Firstly, even though it is small and old, the environment is not as good as the first place. However, living there would give me more time to prepare in the morning, allowing me to wake up later and reduce stress. Secondly, there are many situations in life that we have to face, so living in a less ideal environment is not necessarily a bad thing. That is why I prefer the second place.
zao I think I will choose a place that is very large and splendid, but it’s very far from your place of work or university, because although it’s very far, but it’s very big and very new. It can provide a very comfortable place to live, and you can live very well, and it can provide a good environment to study or work. Although it is very far from your place of work or university, but you can find a way to deal with it. “I think I would choose the large and splendid place, even though it’s far from my work or university. Despite the distance, the size and newness of the place would provide a comfortable living environment and a good space to study or work. Although commuting might be a challenge, I believe I can find a way to manage it.”
Steven I want to choose the second place, although it’s small and old, it doesn’t matter, because study is my job so far, and I’m a lazy people, I don’t want to live in a home that so far from my university, and I want to sleep more. If I can’t have a good sleep, I think it’s not good for my study, and it will influence my emotion. “I would prefer to choose the second place, even though it is small and old. The reason is that my studies are currently my main focus, and I tend to be a bit lazy. Living far from my university would not be ideal for me as it would take up more time and energy to commute. Additionally, getting enough sleep is crucial for my academic performance, and if I cannot have a good sleep due to a long commute, it might negatively affect my emotions and overall well-being.”
Joyce I will choose the small and old place that I prefer to live in because the most important thing is that I can save time because it just takes less than five minutes to get to the work or university. If I save my time, I can do many things to develop my job or my courses in my work or in the university, so I will choose the place that’s small and old. “I would choose the small and old place because the most important factor for me is saving time. It would take less than five minutes to commute to work or university from there. By saving time, I can focus on developing my job or my courses at work or in the university. Therefore, I prefer the small and old place.”
Michael   I’m sorry, but the student’s response does not provide any relevant information or address the topic given. The response is unrelated to the question.
Alice I’d like to choose the small and old one. Firstly, it can avoid late for school. For example, if teacher speaks some important point, I can’t hear it and I will lose many things. Secondly, I can sleep enough so that I can have enough energy to prepare the study. For example, if I need to memorize some complex formulas, this time I can remember quickly and do it better. So I think it’s better to choose small and old one. I would prefer to choose the small and old place. Firstly, it would help me avoid being late for school. For example, if a teacher mentions an important point, I might not be able to hear it and would miss out on crucial information. Secondly, I would be able to get enough sleep, which would give me sufficient energy to study. For instance, if I needed to memorize complex formulas, I would be able to do it quickly and perform better. Therefore, I believe it is better to choose the small and old place.
Selina I will choose the second place. First, although it is very small and very old, but it is close to the university and I can get there in a short time. Maybe I can spend time to do other things. It is great. And second, it can avoid many things, such as getting late to work. And if I get to work early, I can prepare many things and it is very great. So I will choose the second place. “I would prefer to live in the second place. Even though it is small and old, it is conveniently located near the university, allowing me to reach there quickly. This would give me more time to do other things, which is great. Additionally, living close to work would help me avoid being late. By arriving early, I can accomplish many tasks and make the most of my time. Therefore, I would choose the second place.”
Camilia to live with the classmates in the school. Because first, I can have more discuss with them and have a good relationship with them. And the second reason is that we can talk about our study and we can solve the problem together. And I think that’s more convenient. And the third reason is that every time I can have discuss with my classmates or friends, it’s relaxed. And also, it’s good for our group work and our communicate, our life experiences also. We can know more about each other. It’s better than live by myself. “I would prefer to live with my classmates near the school. Firstly, living with them would allow me to have more discussions and develop good relationships. Secondly, we would be able to talk about our studies and solve problems together, which I find very convenient. Additionally, having the opportunity to discuss with my classmates or friends anytime would create a relaxed atmosphere. Moreover, living together would be beneficial for our group work, communication, and sharing life experiences. It would enable us to know each other better, which is much better than living alone.”
Eric I choose a very small and very old house. The first reason is, a small and old house didn’t affect your learning if it is safety. For example, if you want to learn, you just need desk and computer, a small house can fit it. Second, small house in your school, you needn’t to pay money to take bus or subway. It’s very convenient. If you take subway in morning, you can see it’s covered. So, I choose a very small and very old house. I would prefer to live in a small and old house for a couple of reasons. Firstly, as long as it is safe, the size and age of the house wouldn’t affect my ability to study. All I really need is a desk and a computer, which can easily fit into a small house. Secondly, living close to my school or workplace would be extremely convenient. I wouldn’t have to spend money on transportation like buses or subways. In fact, if I take the subway in the morning, I can see that it’s always crowded. So, that’s why I choose a very small and very old house.
Andy I’d like to live in the old but small house near the school, and the reason is as follows. First, if I leave the house far to my school, maybe spend more money to go to the school. It is not really economic, and also it spends me a lot of time to go to school. But if I live in the old house but near the school, I just spend this time, just five minutes. Also, if I work in the old house, I can work and go to school quickly, so I can work more nice and more wonderful. So I’d like to live in the old house but near the school. “I would prefer to live in the small, old house near the school. The main reason is that if I live far from school, it would cost me more money and time to commute. This would not be economical for me. On the other hand, if I live in the old house near the school, it would only take me five minutes to get there. Additionally, living near the school would allow me to quickly go to work and attend classes, enabling me to have a more productive and enjoyable day. Therefore, I would choose to live in the old house near the school.”
Joe I think I will choose the second place because although it’s very old, but I will spend all day in my working place and the university, so it’s nothing, it’s not matter to the house if it’s very small and very old. The second reason is that the house is very small and old, it’s nothing. I don’t have many wants of my life. If I can sleep and I can eat there and sleep well in my house, that’s good. So I didn’t have many wants of my house, it’s enough. “I think I will choose the second place because even though it’s very old, it doesn’t matter much since I will be spending most of my day at work or university. The second reason is that I don’t have many requirements for my living space. As long as I can sleep and eat comfortably in my house, that’s all I need. So I don’t have many expectations for my house, it’s sufficient.”
Karl I decided to choose the large and brand new big house, because big house can let me put more things in it, but also the small house is near to the university, I can’t put so many things in it, the brand new house, all the things are new, and old house, maybe all the things are too old to use, so I chose the large and brand new house. “I decided to choose the large and brand new house because it would allow me to have more space for my belongings. Although the small house is closer to the university, it wouldn’t accommodate all of my things. Additionally, the brand new house offers all new appliances and furniture, whereas the old house may have outdated items. Therefore, I ultimately chose the large and brand new house.”
Carol I prefer the second place because the first place may be more expensive because it’s very big and it very close to my university and work. Okay, it’s very important and I think it’s very convenient. The reason is that I won’t be late for school or job and I can stay up late to leave. And if I leave myself, I don’t use a lot of place to live. So this is the reason. That’s all. Thank you. I prefer the second place because the first place may be more expensive since it’s very big and far from my university and work. Okay, it’s very important and I think it’s very convenient. The reason is that I won’t be late for school or work, and I can stay up late without worrying about commuting. And if I live by myself, I don’t need a lot of space. So that’s the reason. That’s all. Thank you.
Keven I’d like to choose the second place, although it’s small and very old, but it’s not so far compared with the first one. The time I saved, I can use it to do other things, like I can remember more words and work for a while. I also don’t worry about getting up late. I would prefer to choose the second place, even though it is small and old. It is not as far compared to the first one. The time I save can be used for other things, like studying more words and working for a while. Additionally, I wouldn’t have to worry about getting up late.
Bobby I will choose the second. This place is very small, but you can get to work or university It’s a five minute and time is very important. Whatever the house was, maybe not uncomfortable than first, but I will choose the second. I would choose the second place. Even though it is small and old, the fact that I can get to work or university in just five minutes is very important to me. The first place may be more comfortable, but I prioritize convenience and time, so I would still choose the second place.
Meredith I chose to live in a second place although it is very small and old, but you can get to work or university in less than 5 minutes. And in your daily life, the Monday to Friday, always you working. So if you choose a place far from your working place or your school, that you need more time to get to there to working. So choose the second place is more convenient for your daily life. And if you want to get somewhere special in your weekend, you can choose other ways to get to there. I chose to live in the second place, even though it is small and old, because it would take less than 5 minutes to get to work or university. Since you work from Monday to Friday, it’s important to have a place that is close to your workplace or school. If you choose a place that is far away, it will take more time to commute. Therefore, choosing the second place would be more convenient for your daily life. Additionally, if you want to go somewhere special on the weekends, you can find other ways to get there.
Jason I will choose a place that is very large and is brand new, because I think the living environment is very important to me. If you live in a very small and very old place, you will not have enough sleeping time, or so it will influence your study in university or work in the companies. And also, now the subway line is very advanced, so you can take a subway to go to work, although it takes a long time, but it’s less expensive. “I would choose a place that is very large and brand new because I believe the living environment is crucial to me. If you live in a small and old place, you may not have enough time to sleep, which can affect your studies at university or work at a company. Additionally, the subway system is highly developed now, so you can take the subway to commute to work, even though it may take a long time, it is a more cost-effective option.”
Raymond I will choose the second place because it’s more close than the first one. Of course, it’s an old house, but it can make me don’t be late for my schoolwork. And I think if a house is old but have nothing to break, it’s OK. And for me, small is an advantage for a house because I really like some Japanese do-welling. “I would choose the second place because it is much closer than the first one. Although it is an old house, it would ensure that I am not late for my school or work. Additionally, if a house is old but everything is in working order, then it is perfectly fine. Moreover, I personally see the advantage in living in a small house, as I really admire the Japanese concept of do-welling.”
Lauren I will choose the second place, which are small and very old. For the first reason, it’s very convenient. Because I’m going to work and university, my time is very valuable. Anytime one minute or five minutes is very valuable. So I should choose the second place. And another reason is it can save my money. Because although it’s very small and very old, I don’t mind these things. So I will choose the second place. “I would choose the second place, which is small and very old. The main reason is convenience. Since I have to commute to work and university, my time is precious. Every minute, even five minutes, matters a lot. So, I would prefer the second place. Additionally, it would help me save money. Despite its small size and old age, I don’t mind these factors. Therefore, I would opt for the second place.”
Tom So large, and it is brand new, because network has a better environment than living in a small and very old house. Nevertheless, I will pay more cost of just the, and also, I will got a better environment to study and better neighborhood will be more better than the small and old place. So I chose the large and brand one. It is more comfortable. So, I would prefer to live in the large, brand new home because it offers a better living environment compared to a small and very old house. However, I understand that I would have to pay a higher cost for it. Additionally, living in a larger and newer home would provide me with a better environment for studying and a nicer neighborhood. Therefore, I choose the large and brand new home as it would be more comfortable for me.
Regina In my opinion, I would choose a very large and brand new house, because I think environment is important. I want to study in a great environment. It can help me to study well, and I can get good grades. If I live in a big house, I will have a good sleeping, and I don’t want to live in a small house. It’s not comfortable. Maybe a small house, maybe like an apartment, maybe it will be noisy. “In my opinion, I would choose a very large and brand new house because I believe that the environment is important. I want to study in a great environment as it can help me perform well academically and achieve good grades. Additionally, living in a spacious house would ensure that I have a comfortable sleeping space. On the other hand, I do not prefer living in a small house as it can be quite uncomfortable. For instance, if I were to live in an apartment, it might be noisy and disrupt my studying.”
Mike I prefer living with other people. There are two points. On the one hand, I think studying with classmates is better than studying alone. Communicating is one of the best ways of studying. I always finish many hard questions by discussion. Also, it saves a lot of money. You can share the cost with the people you live with. My uncle lives abroad and saves a lot of money by this way. So I think it’s better. “I prefer living with other people for two reasons. Firstly, I believe studying with classmates is more beneficial than studying alone. Communication is one of the best ways to learn, and I find that discussing difficult questions with others helps me understand them better. Additionally, living with others allows you to share expenses, which can save a lot of money. My uncle lives abroad and he saves a significant amount of money by splitting costs with his roommates. So, overall, I think it’s a better option.”
Isaiah I prefer to live in the second place, although it is very small and very old, but I can get to my school in less than five minutes. It means I can have more free time to do what I want to do, like I can have more time to study, I can have more time to do exercise. It’s up to me, but if you live in the first place, you don’t have such as this more time, you will have more time on transporting. “I prefer to live in the second place, even though it is small and old. The main reason is that I can reach my school in less than five minutes. This means I would have more free time to do things I enjoy, such as studying and exercising. If I were to live in the first place, I wouldn’t have as much time for these activities because I would spend more time on transportation.”
Mason Of course I choose the first more and very old place and just less than five minutes to get to university. Okay the first because it is more efficient efficient. I can I can have more time to spend on my favorite things. I’m just in the road the second. I don’t like the large large brand-new and it’s the large space is not useful for me. “Of course, I would choose the first option, even though it is very old and takes less than five minutes to get to the university. The reason behind my choice is that it is more efficient. By living closer to my university, I can save a lot of time and have more opportunities to engage in my favorite activities. On the other hand, I don’t prefer the large, brand-new place because the spaciousness doesn’t serve any practical purpose for me.”
Claire I will choose the second one. The place is very small and it’s very old. Because I think, even though the house is very small and very old, but it’s very close to the university. I can get a lot of time to study or work and maybe I can get more money to find a more good house. So I think the second place I want to choose. “I would choose the second place. Even though it is small and old, it is very close to the university. This would give me more time to study or work and potentially earn more money to find a better house. So, I think the second place is the one I would prefer.”
Jenny I’d like to choose a place that is very large and its brand is new. There are some reasons. Because I think a good environment is very important to yourself and you can have a good environment to live in and to do such as your work or job or homework. On the other hand, although it is very far from my workplace or university, I can choose to get up earlier and that can also help me get a good habit. So, all in all, I think I’d like to choose the large and brand house to live in. “I would prefer to choose a place that is very large and brand new. There are several reasons for this. Firstly, I believe that having a good environment is crucial for one’s well-being, as it can provide a conducive living and working space. Even though this place is far from my workplace or university, I can adjust my schedule by waking up earlier, which can also help me develop a good habit. Ultimately, I believe that the benefits of living in a spacious and modern house outweigh the inconvenience of the distance.”